Post by Ginger on May 15, 2009 18:16:31 GMT -8
I did this out of pure entertainment, so please, cope with it. I made it on another site where I am an admin.
I'm going to be really frustrated if I don't see a bio that has proper grammar, spelling and has a least some effort in it.
So I'm writing this to show you how to make a proper bio. ;D
First, grammar. There, They're and Their, Two, Too and To etc. are some grammar faults while usually the rest is pathetic errors. Look at the difference between these two sentences:
1. Mine mom bakes well cookies.
2. My mom bakes good cookies.
See the difference in these sentences? Just little things like these make wrong sentences upside down. Mine was replaced with My, and since well describes verbs and good describes nouns, we switched those too. Let's see another pair:
1. You dad play basketball good.
2. Your dad plays basketball well.
Again, You dad doesn't sound right like Your dad does, and singular nouns has an s or es after the verb it does.( Except for is, are and was etc.) Good and Well we already described, so let's move on to spelling.
Use Spell Check! Unless of course you're replying to a post, so if the word is underlined then either use a dictionary ;D or modify it after it has been posted, then you can use Spell Check. Some common spelling errors are effect and affect, two and too and to, and whole and hole, However, homonyms are tricky, as they might be spelled right but not the word you're looking for. Then, you should look up the definition you want. Now, finally, discussing effort.
Well, I hope this is an effort site, because I really get sick of sitting on my chair looking at my laptop and groan, "I want to accept this but it's more looking like rubbish than a bio!" Now, I haven't refused any bio but this post I think will help with the agony I sometimes have. First, I hate seeing, ' Black she-cat with amber eyes'. Boring! How about, 'A lean, strong black she-cat cat that's pelt fades into the night. She has fiery amber eyes that glare at anything, anywhere'. Now this actually let's me read it without drooling on the keyboard and having my mom yell at me for not having my computer tidy! Now, yap yap yap, let's see this placed into action, every bit of it into a bio. Look at the good bio and the bad bio:
Bad Bio:
Name: Owel of Fliing Night
Age: 2 years
Gender: Boy
Tribe: Trie of Hidden shadows
Rank: Warrioor
Appearance: Black pelt, grein eyes, longish tail
Personality: no very nice
History: born kitty. trashed in twoleg TRASH? FOUND BY TRIBE.
Okay, I over exaggerated a little, but some bios are very close to being like that! Now for the good one.
Good Bio:
Name: Owl of Flying Night
Age: 2 years
Gender: Tom
Tribe: Tribe of Hidden Shadows
Rank: Warrior
Appearance: Owl is a sleek tom cat with a shadow pelt. His eyes are a green that seem to always sparkle. He has a long tail that assists in balancing. His nose is a rose red, however his glittering claws are long and sharp. Owl is a very handsome and strong cat.
Personality: He is nice to his friends and leader, but don't mess with him. He can be known as a betrayer to unaware cats. Most of the time he is thinking and serious, but as a kit he was a prankster, and still can be. If you're not his friend, watch your back...
History: Owl was born a kittypet, dumped in some Twoleg trash at a young age. One day, when he was hunting he bumped into the leader, who invited him to the tribe. Owl became the best apprentice and it wasn't long before he was made a warrior.
Please, give me a break! I know, I'm a critic but HELP! PLEASE!
I'm going to be really frustrated if I don't see a bio that has proper grammar, spelling and has a least some effort in it.
So I'm writing this to show you how to make a proper bio. ;DFirst, grammar. There, They're and Their, Two, Too and To etc. are some grammar faults while usually the rest is pathetic errors. Look at the difference between these two sentences:
1. Mine mom bakes well cookies.
2. My mom bakes good cookies.
See the difference in these sentences? Just little things like these make wrong sentences upside down. Mine was replaced with My, and since well describes verbs and good describes nouns, we switched those too. Let's see another pair:
1. You dad play basketball good.
2. Your dad plays basketball well.
Again, You dad doesn't sound right like Your dad does, and singular nouns has an s or es after the verb it does.( Except for is, are and was etc.) Good and Well we already described, so let's move on to spelling.
Use Spell Check! Unless of course you're replying to a post, so if the word is underlined then either use a dictionary ;D or modify it after it has been posted, then you can use Spell Check. Some common spelling errors are effect and affect, two and too and to, and whole and hole, However, homonyms are tricky, as they might be spelled right but not the word you're looking for. Then, you should look up the definition you want. Now, finally, discussing effort.
Well, I hope this is an effort site, because I really get sick of sitting on my chair looking at my laptop and groan, "I want to accept this but it's more looking like rubbish than a bio!" Now, I haven't refused any bio but this post I think will help with the agony I sometimes have. First, I hate seeing, ' Black she-cat with amber eyes'. Boring! How about, 'A lean, strong black she-cat cat that's pelt fades into the night. She has fiery amber eyes that glare at anything, anywhere'. Now this actually let's me read it without drooling on the keyboard and having my mom yell at me for not having my computer tidy! Now, yap yap yap, let's see this placed into action, every bit of it into a bio. Look at the good bio and the bad bio:
Bad Bio:
Name: Owel of Fliing Night
Age: 2 years
Gender: Boy
Tribe: Trie of Hidden shadows
Rank: Warrioor
Appearance: Black pelt, grein eyes, longish tail
Personality: no very nice
History: born kitty. trashed in twoleg TRASH? FOUND BY TRIBE.
Okay, I over exaggerated a little, but some bios are very close to being like that! Now for the good one.
Good Bio:
Name: Owl of Flying Night
Age: 2 years
Gender: Tom
Tribe: Tribe of Hidden Shadows
Rank: Warrior
Appearance: Owl is a sleek tom cat with a shadow pelt. His eyes are a green that seem to always sparkle. He has a long tail that assists in balancing. His nose is a rose red, however his glittering claws are long and sharp. Owl is a very handsome and strong cat.
Personality: He is nice to his friends and leader, but don't mess with him. He can be known as a betrayer to unaware cats. Most of the time he is thinking and serious, but as a kit he was a prankster, and still can be. If you're not his friend, watch your back...
History: Owl was born a kittypet, dumped in some Twoleg trash at a young age. One day, when he was hunting he bumped into the leader, who invited him to the tribe. Owl became the best apprentice and it wasn't long before he was made a warrior.
Please, give me a break! I know, I'm a critic but HELP! PLEASE!
